I enjoyed the funny situations and comedic nature of your story. I would definitely keep that theme.

I did have one suggestion: I noticed some minor grammatical errors. They can easily be found and corrected by using Grammarly. I highly recommend their free service, as it has saved my stories from thousands of mistakes.

*In fact, I used Grammarly to check this comment, and I found 5 mistakes in it!*

Thank you for sharing!